April 11th, 2012

Leverage, Sophie, parker, Nate Ford, team

I am fed up!

So. I was trolling the net to find goo BDSM fiction. Well written BDSM fiction.
I came across one with a character whoring himself out, and you know what annoyed me about that story? it wasn't the fact that later not he character got tricked into a non-con situation, it was the fact that the author spelt "cool" as "kewel".

Who the fuck spells the word like that? Other than a lazy ass. I mean. Really?

Second thing, and in five separate fictions I tried to read but didn't because of this.
and, I have ranted about it; "I have a really HOT sex story about this guy named Craig! but, first I'll tell yew all about myself. I am five foot four, I have light blue eyes, blond hair and a hot body. I work out at the gym Aaaallll the time because that's the sort of body society wants and that's the sort of body the author wishes they had. :) anyway, now let me tell you about Craig! He's six foot fourteen and he has huge feet. They stink but I love them! blah, blah, blah..."

I made up the foot fetish part. but that's not the point. It's annoying and the WRONG way to start any story. I don't give a shit about what these character's look like. I can easily substitute my own characters in my head or character's from a fandom. URG. I wish people could learn how to FUCKING WRITE!

I also want people to learn how to spell. I saw "moth" as "mouth" - the words aren't even the same. How can you kiss a moth, much less put your tongue down the Moth's....mouth? that doesn't even make sense.

Oh, and I fucking hate those stories where the sub/slave character has a horrible, degrading name. I saw a story called Smallbutt. It was horrible! fucking horrible!
What the fuck is with people and degrading names anyway? I can only say that it's a stereo type of Dom's. YOu have the sub character, who has a horrible name, and the Dom is just...horrible. I hate abusive!dooms. They suck. They're just assholes. And I urge anyone who has a dom that thinks it's okay to call you horrible names to get out of that relationship. If the dom thinks that's okay, who the fuck know what else that stupid person thinks is okay.

So; my question is.
Is it all right for me to write a story about this topic.
I keep wanting to do a thing where the abusive dom get's some comeuppance for the shit they pull on other people. My problem is that I don't want people outside the community to read my story and think this actually happens. I mean, I'm trying to make a point here. That not all Dom's are good Dom's and one must be careful about these sorts of things. I dunno. It's just an idea. I want to set a mystery in a BDSM Club dealing with this problem. Because it is. I've read several accounts online about "Dom's" trying to pick up Subs but being dick's about it.

And not only that, but I'm worried about the people inside the community. Will I be totally laughed out of town for this? especially since I practice nothing of it? I keep not doing it because of this. I don't want people to get the wrong idea. Not that the idea is even clear enough for me to write. I don't know anything other than I want to write a hard core BDSM lifestyle story.

I must be fucked in the head.

Okay.
Well....yes. I think that will do it for me now.
Leverage, Sophie, parker, Nate Ford, team

What to do now?????

I used five question marks in my title because I feel that number sufficiently illustrates my utter lack of muse on TMCOSH <-- "The Many Cumming's of Sherlock Holmes". The WHOLE story is all about kinky sex. And, to get Sherlock to....unwind about sex, with his greatest enemy - not Mycroft, that'd be incest and I don't write that. I mean, Jim Moriarty.

I don't have a problem with plot; mistily because there isn't a plot. Of course you have the whole "if you don't have sex with me I'll kill your best friend" thing. But, you gotta manipulate Sherlock into this sort of thing. He would just...do it...right?

He is glaring at me...ooohhhh....Sherlock is cute when he's pissed. :)

ANYWAY -
Jim insists on it being as kinky as possible. But, after last night. Meh.
I can't. Mostly because I want to find something original. And...well.
I dunno if a lot of people do Tickle Torture. I've read some fucking hot stories about it.
I think I'll throw that in. Meh. I got over the piss kink pretty quickly. I dunno if it'd be a feature in ALL my stories. But...we'll see.

This post is basically just for me; because it helps me to write the thoughts out.
But, if anyone has an opinion, give it to me. Outside views are important because if I don't get them - I stay in my head for too long.

Consulting Detectives can have Ego's.
Writer's can't.
Not even Pro writer's.
lol.
Leverage, Sophie, parker, Nate Ford, team

Tickling Arthur's Feet - By Christopher Rosalie - Story Review

I decided that to illustrate what I think are good kink fiction - I can't call this BDSM Fiction because there really isn't any sex in it - that I'd review stories. Good and Bad.
It's a tool for writer's. Now, I'm not saying that what I'm gonna write here goes for everyone. Critics sometimes know what they're talking about and sometimes they don't.
I decided on a classic fiction for today's review. I do like this story. I've read it a few times. I don't know why.

Okay; The story is about a guy, an executive, who wants to buy a house.
He goes to meet someone to see a house. In the basement, he is shown this chair. He is curious about it and so he get's trick into getting strapped in. I can't explain how this thing works. But, there are make shift stalks locked around his ankles. And since he's tied to the chair, Arthur can't go anywhere. And then - that is if I am remembering the story correctly - the guy he met for the house showing tells him that it was all a gag and that it's just pretense to get Arthur into the tickling chair.

Yes, that's right.
This is a Tickle Torture fetish/kink fiction.
I'm using Fiction here instead of fic, because I'm a fan fic writer, so I think of fandoms when Fic is said. So, Fiction is to show that this is an original story. I hope that works.

"My wife and I were going to buy a house. I could not believe it. After being married for three years and paying rent to a landlord we could not stand, we were able to afford a house. All our scrimping and saving had finally paid off. I was at work when I got the call from a Real Estate agency that we had been dealing with that they wanted to show us a choice house as soon as possible. It was nine thirty AM on the dot when my phone rang."

That is the first paragraph of the story. And while it's not too engaging of the reader. It's still better than the "let me describe myself using crags list lingo" that most stories tend to be. Now. I will say that this story is slightly dub-connish. There is a bit of boring set up. But, I have to do that as well. So, it's forgiven.

Let me tell you though. This is a well written story. I have not yet seen a misspelled word; or some other glaringly obvious grammar mistake which tells you the author is either lazy or a novice. Because that usually shows up within the first bit of text.

"My name is Arthur Gimble, I'm thirty years old, an executive with Chase bank. I have short cut brown hair, parted on the side in a banker's cut and brown chestnut shaped eyes. I'm five feet nine inches tall. I had started out at Chase bank as a teller when I was nineteen years old. Through a lot of hard work, four years of college and two years of banking school I worked my way up the corporate ladder. At the age of thirty I was in charge of the Customer Account department and also in charge of a few of the bank's key accounts. Three years ago I married the girl of my dreams. And now we were prepared to buy a house. Yes, it sure seemed that everything was falling in place in my life. I didn't know as I headed for the subway to Brooklyn that I would fall into place myself, actually I would fall stupidly and helplessly into place while checking out the house in Bay Ridge. Dressed in a navy blue pinstriped suit, white shirt, a dark red silk necktie and black lace-up wing tips I dashed down the steps to the subway..."

Yeah....no.
Boring.
Sorry. I will say that it's better than crags list with the numbers. But...I don't know if there is a better way to do this. Unless you add a character bio at the top along with the title and authors notes for the story. I mean. There has GOT to be a better way. I don't understand my preoccupation with this...writing technique. It seems so old school....

"So there I was, handcuffed to a chair with my damned feet locked in a pair of stocks. I wriggled my fingers and my socked toes nervously. I watched as Ronald switched on the record player and the turntable began spinning the sticks with the feathers on the ends of them around and around. On the turntable speed of 45 RPM's it was moving pretty fast. I watched as the feathers on the ends of the sticks spun around and moved all over the bottoms of my (still) shoed and socked feet.

"See?" Ronald asked me, looking down sort of hungrily at my feet. "It's called an Executive Tickle Torture machine." - "

And now we are getting down to the good bit.
I mean, the dude had to get Arthur into that chair some how.
I say it's dub-con because they didn't meet looking for a good time.
In fact, neither know each other very well. No boundaries have been set. No safe words - though, I read an article that said that safe words are kinda silly seeing as how in times of great distress the sub will forget what the word is - erm...I dunno what to say on that, but I still believe in safe words so whatever. This means, that since nothing has been negotiated, that this scene is dub-conned. I can't say rape because there isn't any sex. There is jerking off, and some piss play...or mention of it. It's kinda hot.

I really like this story because it's not pretentious. The Author is talking this with respect. Because, sometimes I'll read stuff in another fiction but it's really gross. It's the same kink, but badly handled <-- pun! - it's icky and makes me physically sick. So I have to find something else to read.

This story, despite the boring parts which is just the fourth bit of the beginning of the fiction, are good. I enjoyed reading the Fiction. I liked both characters. I found the ending a bit odd. But. I won't spoil. It might just be me. Still. I liked it because the guy wasn't put down by it. There weren't any crass jokes, or bad names being called. It was handled very well. <-- Another Pun!

This, I think, is a classic story. I wanted to do one I liked first.
Of course there will always be something I don't like. I haven't found a Fiction yet that I've read over and over again because it's perfect for me. I've found bits and pieces that are, and so I will happily ignore the boring parts just to get to the good bit.

And this is good.
If you want to try something new. This is mostly tickle torture. Which I've found is really hot as long as the story is written well.

DISCLAIMER - I'm going to assumee that EVERYONE that clicks on the link is of age to read this stuff.

Link - http://web.archive.org/web/200012041108/http://www.ropejock.com/st300/ticklingarthurs.html